Oh,
They come and go,
Come and
go
Nervous giggles do not quite fill
The hot emptiness
Not quite covering ignorance,
Words tiptoeing around cries
of selfishness, barely shielding
Denial --
Fooling themselves
Fooling
Fools
Fools of fake love.
In again,
Out again,
Quick war
Quick war …
Numb to everything, and all
That is real
Breathing,
Exhale hot breath -- insensitiveness
Out
Inhale cool air -- selfishness
In
True love is deceased
No tears, nothing there
To shed
Clowns,
White clowns,
Chopping off each other’s limbs
In midst of terror,
Sounds of laughter are heard
Sounds of laughter -- the only thing to be reckoned
Limbs flying now,
Whipping air now,
Bashing bodies now
Cars wildly racing
Circling
Racing
Racing, and bashing, and circling now
Rockets plunging into dark waters of
Endless depth.
Tearing clouds and
Ripping stars
Engulfed in mud-colored walls
Fidgeting, nervous, and empty
Oh,
They come and go,
Come and
go
Go, go --
go away
Gone, forever.
Jump and soar
Down, down
through the air
A feather gliding
A child sliding down an invisible slide
Drifting, and hovering --
Swimming through open emptiness,
Hovering inches from the ground
Seconds from impact
Madeline, this piece had a ton of emotion and I really enjoyed reading it. What I especially liked about this piece was the layout and the repetition. Great Job! Can't wait to read more of your writing.
ReplyDeleteWell, I love this poem. That may be my bias, but I don't particularly care. It's quite good. I can see you fulfilling what you set out to do in the author's note, so there is a real measure to why I am saying it is so good. Besides, it reads an awful lot like Eliot. One of the things you could do more in the author's note is to cite what poet you are influenced by, and what style in particular you a re trying to invoke. One of the things I love about that note is your thoroughness; if anyone who didn't know how to read poetry doubted your ability to understand the novel, you assuage those doubts with the insight provided. Excellent.
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